The beginning was good. But it needs a little more work, I like it. I would suggest making it more captivating like saying something along the lines of: I never dreamed that one day I would see him again, that my hearts desire would actually become a reality. That one day, I would kill him, but now that he's here, actually here I knew that I had been in denial the whole time, you see I'm in love with the man I hate, I'm in love with Edward Scissorhands. This is just a suggestion, but yeah it was good keep it up.
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